When I go to holiday, I pack my suitcase very quickly and not organize. First, I bring many clothes like t-shirt, short, and jacket because weather maybe change. I also pack my slipper and shoes but sometimes I forget socks. I always bring my toothbrush, toothpaste and shampoo but I don’t bring towel because hotel have it. Also I bring phone charger, headphone and sometimes camera for take picture. I put everything inside my suitcase without folding so it become very messy. Finally, I try to close my suitcase but it is too full and hard to close.
Student's sentence Corrected sentence Grammar explanation Better sentence
Student’s Sentence: When I go to holiday, I pack my suitcase very quickly and not organize.
Corrected Sentence: When I go on holiday, I pack my suitcase very quickly and do not organize it.
Grammar Explanation: Use “go on holiday” (correct preposition) and include the object “it” for clarity.
Better Sentence: When I go on holiday, I usually pack my suitcase quickly without organizing it.
Student’s Sentence: First, I bring many clothes like t-shirt, short, and jacket because weather maybe change.
Corrected Sentence: First, I bring many clothes like T-shirts, shorts, and jackets because the weather may change.
Grammar Explanation: Use plural forms for countable items and add “the” before “weather”; “maybe” → “may be” (modal verb).
Better Sentence: First, I pack different clothes such as T-shirts, shorts, and jackets because the weather may change.
Student’s Sentence: I also pack my slipper and shoes but sometimes I forget socks.
Corrected Sentence: I also pack my slippers and shoes, but sometimes I forget socks.
Grammar Explanation: Use plural form “slippers” and add a comma before “but.”
Better Sentence: I also pack my slippers and shoes, but I sometimes forget to bring socks.
Student’s Sentence: I always bring my toothbrush, toothpaste and shampoo but I don’t bring towel because hotel have it.
Corrected Sentence: I always bring my toothbrush, toothpaste, and shampoo, but I do not bring a towel because the hotel has one.
Grammar Explanation: Add commas in a list, include article “a,” and fix subject-verb agreement (“hotel has”).
Better Sentence: I always bring my toothbrush, toothpaste, and shampoo, but I do not bring a towel because the hotel provides one.
Student’s Sentence: Also I bring phone charger, headphone and sometimes camera for take picture.
Corrected Sentence: Also, I bring a phone charger, headphones, and sometimes a camera to take pictures.
Grammar Explanation: Add commas, articles, plural forms, and correct infinitive “to take.”
Better Sentence: I also bring a phone charger, headphones, and sometimes a camera to take pictures.
Student’s Sentence: I put everything inside my suitcase without folding so it become very messy.
Corrected Sentence: I put everything inside my suitcase without folding, so it becomes very messy.
Grammar Explanation: Add a comma before “so” and correct verb form “becomes.”
Better Sentence: I put everything into my suitcase without folding, so it becomes very messy.
Student’s Sentence: Finally, I try to close my suitcase but it is too full and hard to close.
Corrected Sentence: Finally, I try to close my suitcase, but it is too full and difficult to close.
Grammar Explanation: Add a comma before “but” and use more formal word “difficult.”
Better Sentence: Finally, I try to close my suitcase, but it is too full and difficult to shut.
Better Paragraph:
When I go on holiday, I usually pack my suitcase quickly without organizing it. First, I pack different clothes such as T-shirts, shorts, and jackets because the weather may change. I also pack my slippers and shoes, but I sometimes forget to bring socks. I always bring my toothbrush, toothpaste, and shampoo, but I do not bring a towel because the hotel provides one. I also bring a phone charger, headphones, and sometimes a camera to take pictures. I put everything into my suitcase without folding, so it becomes very messy. Finally, I try to close my suitcase, but it is too full and difficult to shut.
